Wang Chung

First of all, I love me a hearty 'ol pirate yarn, and this certainly fits the bill. I deeply enjoy your writing style: clean, descriptive, and effective. I especially like ...

Interesting, but I must say it's a little odd, especially for a "blip" from the middle of a book. It almost seems as though you should have placed this in ...

Little short for a chapter I'd say, but a healthy start, certainly. As a hook this worked quite well, and if you'd do me the honor of sending a little ...

Okay, first of all, for an opening for a film, it doesn't give you any insight whatsoever as to what the film is going to be about, so it kind ...

Very interesting. It was well written. Simply written, but well done nonetheless. I enjoyed how you gave us a glimpse of the second chapter, giving us a peek at what's ...

I'm new to poetry, so feel free to disregard anything that I say, but this was WAY to short. *Scrolls down to bottom of page, rubs eyes in disbelief* Where's ...

Great, but one question. Where's the rest? I want to know more! You mention that he is half-human in th title. What does this mean? You don't have to tell ...

The writing was quite good, however, you have made many grammar errors, so you need to look over this a couple times and fix them. I wish you would have ...

I quite liked it. I would like to see this character in a story somewhere. She's completely three-dimensional, and the way you described her was great. However, you seem to ...

Unlike what the other memebers have stated, I quite liked the beginning. It was simply set up, but it worked. The writing was quite good, you described Harry's descent into ...

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! I HATE "And then I woke up" endings! Also, the story needs alot more description, and try for some originality. Aliens abducting someone and performing experiments on them... Co

The writing is very basic and straightforward, trying adding some more exotic words to your vocabulary. Also, I really despise "And then I woke up" endings, and although it's not ...

A wonderful demonstration of how a child's mind works, and to think you thought of this while lying in bed! I'm probably reading a little to much into this, but ...

Your story is fantastic. Overall, it has very Douglas Adams type feel to it, not only in the writing, but in the story as well. I'm sure you know who ...